Many thanks, Jemima.I tried to break as many rules as possible - have a beginning, middle and end - do not repeat yourself - use your word allowance - you know the sort of thing.So it means a lot to get positive feedback.
Love seeing this here, Martin! Breaking rules is fun, yeah. I love the way this requires several readings and re-thinkings, even though it's the shortest piece in Flash Flood (that I know of, anyway). Cool idea, cool images.
Thanks, Michelle. I was lucky with this one! It was inspired by the UK newspaper "The Daily Telegraph" and its support of Brian Aldiss's "mini-saga" concept - flash fiction with a requirement of 50 words. This does not meet the criterion, and I spent a long time trying to make it fit! But the asymmetry and ambiguity is worth the failing!